the pain had vanished.... the heart so numb
the sighs were hollow like the drowning sun...
my hand stretched out for a gasp of life
shadows disappearing in the morning light.......
i strained so hard for the final look...
tears all blinding my gaze of u...
is this the end i ask myself
where was i when life passed me by
it all flashed past like a blaze of light....
it seemed a blur n so it was..
a moment to end that seemed so far....
P.S : i knw i promised part 2 to my previous post n i shall keep up my word..till then jus few words which tumbled out when i read the plight of a young girl who met her end quite unexpectedly.... maybe this was how she felt...
25 comments:
Nups,
Full of emotions and really moves one's heart.
Posted one on 31st.
Take care
Hey Nups...That was indeed sad and moving..where was i when life passed me bySo true...Wish no one needs to think this way on their end...
The poem goes so deep... Really moving and tragic.. How well you have captured those last few poignant moments!
I could imagine someone's heart feeling all the above ... so sad, so touching ... I wish that girl peace in her afterlife !!
You have written such touching thoughts... The lines...
"where was I when life passed me by"
"a moment to end that seemed so far"
...say so much...and are so true...we all should be "present" in our daily life...mind and body...be aware of your moments...you don't get them back.
hi Jack
will check ur post......had been doing it almost daily..guess the day i din u posted :)
hey Stilness...
ya i knw... an end no one ever prepares for especially at such a young age....
hi Darklord
m glad u liked it..coming frm u is special cos i like ur poetry..n i rarely delve into it.... but yes this one is special to me
hi Adi
i left some stinker of a comment on ur post the other day..i was terribly low ... hope it din freak u out :) anyws.. hope the girl's family gets the strength n she finds her peace
hey Wanda
thanks dear for appreciating it..it was heartfelt... i knw wat u mean..all we have is now..tomo is a farce ..don u thnk so....
Well, I think there's a poet in every one of us... and with ur writing skills, you've done a great job at it, no matter you delve rarely into it!
Very sweet... very touching... and perceptive...
hi darklord
thanks :) hope i can churn out some more good stuff
hey Shimmering
glad u liked it... did u read the comment i left on urs...
hey Adi
i left my mail id in ur spinoff of latest post... will surely look up ur post on soul ... my part 2 is still pending...
hey nups!
my first visit.. loved ur comment on mine. guess u got a regular visitor here for u..
as far as the post goes lovely write up. heartfelt n painful! loved d line "shadows disappearing in moonlight!" its sad to know... but good work.
Babes, I've sent you two mails and no replies ??? Hope alls ok ... Are they going to junk ?? Let me know ... Take care
very well written.. similar to i guess whats in my mind
Nups,
Posted 2 more after that. Still waiting for your views.
Take care
Jack
hey buddy sorry have been on holiday so din check blog..will visit u asap
Distantcords...
thanks for visitng... glad u liked it :)
hey Shruti
jus when u said "regular visitor" realised i haven posted a thng since a long time ..will soon do babes :)n hope to c u around
Adi
left a msg for u on ur blog... m going right away to check mail... sorry for the delay
beautiful! :). Sent you an email.
I tell you what ?
this post is great !!
its looks like its written by a human being who's full of feelings
congratulations on this write :)
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